Feedback from professor that needs to be fixed From rough draft uploaded below Your paper is a great start to your final draft. You are on the right track. You have some clear information in your paper about the history of police brutality and the idea of when it started. I would like to see the claim/argument made about the action of police brutality, not the history of when it started. This is not a strong claim or one that produces the critical reasoning I would like to see in this paper. After you have developed that, then produce the counterargument on the opposite side of the claim. The inclusion of historical data and information can be used to support either side and you can demonstrate the subjective interpretations that are being used on each side around the topic. The goal is to choose one side of the argument and then explain all of the questions in relation to that argument. Many of components you were missing included the research and data surrounding the issue. You can also look at the percentages of people on each side, states data, historical data of reported cases. It looked like all of the cases you mentioned were against African Americans. This is alright
, if you want to stick to that population. Just be clear that it is not all cases and forms of police brutality. Be analytical and assess the argument, not just the topic. Please read through my comments so you know what needs to change,what is missing, and what may need some clarification. It is especially important to review each of the questions for the final paper and make sure that after you state the claim/argument regarding guns, that you then answer according to that statement. what the guide lines are below. The goal of this paper is to construct a fair-minded, unbiased, analytical analysis of a topic in a comprehensive essay. Your essay must be 5–7 pages (1600–1900 words) in length. The abstract, title page, and reference list do count in the page or word count. The essay must have the following elements: You must use five scholarly or academic sources and all research should be published within the last five years. Sources not scholarly or academic in nature may affect your grade. It is highly recommended that most of your research be conducted via the WCU Library. Eligible sources listed best-to-worst: Sources that may be used on this essay include the following: